World War Four The Vampire Wars

[Lammalord]

Hey! Sadly Monkey is not the ONLY person to pick up writing.  I think spaceo gave us to darn many ideas.  So if anyone ever gets the time, check what I got so far.  Only the first 2 chapters have been edited (by others) but from the reviews I got, it's still pretty darn good. 

Now, it's not about vampires. (I use the word vampire the same way someone could tell a 16th century man a cell phone is magic) Well, Look it up! It currently has 16 (short) chapters. Enjoy!

Link:  http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2626028/1

Summary:

A girl starts changing. She evolves, gets massive power and decides she wants to use it to change the world. To fix it. Now of course this idea of hers will never work but she goes for it anyways. The result: the fourth world war. Not exactly what she intended. The war is later named after her and most of the blood shed is in her name. Next thing you know every superpower wants her on their side and it turns into a war of execution. A war of assassins and silent murders. corruption and the seeking of power. All of this made possible by the number one tool of murder. Her. Why can't she stop this madness? No one knows why she doesn’t stop letting the world get thrust into madness. Letting it get thrown into the bloodiest war of humanity - The Vampire War.


Current Chapters:

1 Sobs
2 Case of a Lifetime
3 I can Read
4 Look What I can Do
5 That was Unexpected
6 I can Control You
7 My First Love
8 Changes
9 Vampire
10 Sean's Dumb Idea
11 Sean's Brilliant Escape
12 Explaining
13 Road to Recovery
14 First Blood
15 Ghoul
16 Him
17 Arrested
18 The Start of Something Big
19 Enter: The Wizard
20 Blood Sucker
21 Running Away
22 You Can't Hide
23 Forest Painted Red
24 History of the Darth
25 Chainmail
26 The Undead is Everywhere
27 Risen Sire Zee Colde
28 Those who Fight
29 White eyes
30 Wardrobe
31 Death of a Perfectly Good Bathroom Stall
32 The Reverse Effect
33 TV
34 Sin and The d**ned Queen
35 You're Not Allowed Anymore
36 Bullets
37 Airport
38 Airplane
39 The Long and Boring Trip
40 What is Going on in Russia
41 I Met the Big Guy
42 Miscalculation
43 The Sahara Desert
44 Strike Zone
45 Pre Slaughter Meditation
46 Security and the Bloody Mess
47 The Deal is Off
48 Courtyard Massacre
49 The Trip to Hell
50 The Devils Mark
51 Calm
52 Tearing Fingers
53  Dead Caravan
54  To Perm
55  Perm

Size:  70,179 words.

[KenquinnTheInsaneOne]

Interesting website and I like your first chapter will read the second later.

Edit: Um did I just complement LammaLord? Kenquinn Glaces out the window behind him, he sighs in relief for the sky is still blue Armageddon is not upon us.

[Lammalord]

Hey! thanks for looking it up

It better be darn good ;) i try very hard lol.

and, well keep an eye out on the sky for me lol.

[Lammalord]

bump!


edit* - yah yah yah double posting is bad blaw blaw blaw - no point in making a new topic when one is already here!


"Posted on: February 17, 2009"

this story has gone from about 8 chapters when it was posted to now 49 chapters. if you started reading it before and liked it - check it out again, its gotten A LOT bigger, and of course even better!!

Current Chapters:

1 Sobs
2 Case of a Lifetime
3 I can Read
4 Look What I can Do
5 That was Unexpected
6 I can Control You
7 My First Love
8 Changes
9 Vampire
10 Sean's Dumb Idea
11 Sean's Brilliant Escape
12 Explaining
13 Road to Recovery
14 First Blood
15 Ghoul
16 Him
17 Arrested
18 The Start of Something Big
19 Enter: The Wizard
20 Blood Sucker
21 Running Away
22 You Can't Hide
23 Forest Painted Red
24 History of the Darth
25 Chainmail
26 The Undead is Everywhere
27 Risen Sire Zee Colde
28 Those who Fight
29 White eyes
30 Wardrobe
31 Death of a Perfectly Good Bathroom Stall
32 The Reverse Effect
33 TV
34 Sin and The d**ned Queen
35 You're Not Allowed Anymore
36 Bullets
37 Airport
38 Airplane
39 The Long and Boring Trip
40 What is Going on in Russia
41 I Met the Big Guy
42 Miscalculation
43 The Sahara Desert
44 Strike Zone
45 Pre Slaughter Meditation
46 Security and the Bloody Mess
47 The Deal is Off
48 Courtyard Massacre
49 The Trip to Hell

Size: 62,284 words.

[KenquinnTheInsaneOne]

Doubple posting does not matter here..... And ill have to start reading it again I stopped around Chapter 7

[Fester]

Lost most of a day at work reading it, can you please do some more now!!!

If you can find an artist it would make an excellent Graphic Novel,

[KenquinnTheInsaneOne]

Chapters: 50 - Words: 63,660 Type faster Lammalord..... Should be doing 10k words a day

[Lammalord]

I got up to 56 written now, up to 52 posted.


I got stuck though for a bit and haven't written anything for a week now :p

as for the story, I'd say it just hit the middle, another 60,000 or so words and its the end   a nice 120,000 unedited lacking detail story ready for a second draft...  and thats about the normal size for a book now-a-days... though it will probably end up 40-50k bigger after detail is added in.


EDIT

50 The Devils Mark
51 Calm
52 Tearing Fingers


Size: 66,040 words.

[KenquinnTheInsaneOne]

Hum when your done the last chapter ill read it and tell you everything thats wrong with it.

[Lammalord]

EDIT

53  Dead Caravan
54  To Perm
55  Perm

Size:  70,179 words.


Keep on reading!

[KenquinnTheInsaneOne]

EDIT

53  Dead Caravan
54  To Perm
55  Perm

Size:  70,179 words.


Keep on reading!

I'm not reading ti right now so how could i keep on reading it?

[Lammalord]

chapters 4-68 have been removed, SORRY!

Reason posted on Chapter 4

[KenquinnTheInsaneOne]

chapters 4-68 have been removed, SORRY!

Reason posted on Chapter 4

Nice can you tell us which one? Aka which publisher requested you remove it?

[Lammalord]

its a self publishing company called Iuniverse - something like a 'last resort' if i can't find a good deal otherwise.  nothing special.   But the point is that a publishing company said 'remove it'  - at this point i don't care which one... it was okay to have say 100-150 pages of the book up online but his statement did have some truth...  having 300+ pages of a book online at this point was a bit.. much.

[deezee66]

I read your 1st 4 chapters today and seems quite good for a 1st draft