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Finwe Mithrandir
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« on: June 13, 2006, 09:24:06 PM »

CHAPTER I:
THE MEN FROM THE STARS

       Many centuries ago in a very small region of space called Sol. There was a planet called by its inhabitants, Earth. This planet was home to very primitive and barbaric beings called Humans or Homo-Sapiens. They lived on Earth for millenia, and they existed as any barbaric species acts. WAR. The Human race has always waged war against their fellow man with the pure goal to annihilate their enemy. A race of extraterrestrials called the Naveil Ra'Tali had visited Earth for most of mankinds existence. The landscapes and the crops that grew there were the best in the whole quandrants around Sol. So the Naveil Ra'Tali thought they could come to Earth to get harvests of food. The Humans thought they were gods as the mystically just appeared from thin air in the middle of their primitive villages, but truthfully they used advanced teleportation arrays. The Humans were very fearful of these powerful beings, the Naveil Ra'Tali found this to be a genetic signal in the Human DNA that leds them to fear what they do not understand. So in that case the Naveil Ra'Tali went to the more responsible civilizations around the Earth. The first civilization was called the Mayans. They helped them build great stone cities. Some of the Mayan people traveled to the Incan people and shared this knowledge. Sadly many hundreds of years later Human explorers came to the Mayan lands and brought famine and disease that infected them and made the Mayans extict. Since the Naveil Ra'Tali was a peaceful race and did not give the Mayans weopons technology that could have helped their fight, although some think it wouldn't have worked anyway. The second civilization was a group called the Egyptians. These people were desert nomads before the Naveil Ra'Tali taught them how to settle down and build great monuments. They build a great four-sided building that started off big and as it went higher grew smaller. These were called pyramids. The Egyptians grew to be very long lived civilization, but sadly to the Naveil Ra'Tali's dismay the Egyptians were a war thriving race. But were not as barbaric as others. One of the last of the civilizations was a Roman outlanding settlement. A Naveil Ra'Tali used a device to make himself look like a human. He was mistakened his name as Jezese. People called him Jesus. He tried to teach the Humans. But for unkown reasons and the Humans fear he was posted to wood with nails. He was taken down by his students and buried in a cave. Due to an unusual healing ability the Naveil Ra'Tali possess, he healed and with great strength moved to burial rock imprissoning him there. He left and went to visit his students. They were shocked and amazed. He soon left Earth as he went to the market square of the town and signaled his mothership the beam him up. He rose into the sky and then teleported to his vessel. Accidently the Naveil Ra'Tali created a Human religion in pose of what happened to Jezese. Many more of the ancient civilizations of Earth were guided by the Naveil Ra'Tali, and they had no idea what they had done. After the Humans became slightly more advanced they decided not to visit Earth so openly again until they became very much more advanced technologicaly and maturely. So they kept an eye on Earths citizens for many a millenia. They saw them in wartime and peacetime. They advanced slowly, but could never shed their joyfulness of war. Although some individual Humans had evolved, it seemed as a mutating genetic problem. For there were some as far back as the Roman Empire. Then there were those who lived during the Earths nineteenth century. After that not many of these evolved humans were ever born. From Leonardo from Vinci to Albert Einstein from Germany. These great people were actually voted to live with the Naveil Ra'Tali. Some more were even abducted by the Naveil Ra'Tali for their great compassion and understanding of life. Then there was a great accident. A scouting vessel was flying above a Earth country called The United States of America. Above the state called New Mexico near the town of Roswell. The shuttle was slowly traveling at a slow speed. Then a strange weather anomaly occured and the craft crashed after being struck be a silent bolt of lightening. There were survivors however and the Humans found them and their ship before help could arive. They were taken to a secret military extension code named Area 51. The scouts and their ships were never found again. The Naveil Ra'Tali will and ever will be known to the Humans as The Men From The Stars.

CHAPTER II:
HUMANS MEET THE NAVEIL RA'TALI

Many centuries pasted since the Roswell crash. The Humans made it a huge joke, but some thought differently. Some beliefed real "aliens" existed and wanted to meet them in peace. Although some, namely the United States Government, wanted to harness their technology. Since the Naveil Ra'Tali knew that the Humans were still not mature and advanced enough to comprehend their great technology in the hopes for peace, they still lay hidden from Earth and its Human occupants. Although the Naveil Ra'Tali took many of Earths other animal species to keep them from the Humans making them extinct, and they left other beings on Earth. In hopes that these strange new beings left on Earth would be proved as a test for the Humans in the field of fearing what they don't understand they seemed to think they were cured. The High Council of Interstellar Civilizations declared that a dimplomatic fleet be sent to Earth to invite them into the Interstellar community. So it is said and so it is done. The Supreme Commander of the Naveil Ra'Tali armadas, Gule Val Tak'Lui, was assigned to escort the dimplomat's ship with his own fleet. They departed to Earth as soon as the fleet was ready. This is an acount of the journey from Ra'Tali Verian Command Station to Earth:

DATALOG ENTRY: 195.3758.19384
COMMANDER: Gule Val Tak'Lui

"Today is a great day. We the Naveil Ra'Tali will be inviting the Humans of Earth into the intergalactic community. Although it is not truelly my particular position to degree diplomatic decisions, I think this may be a mistake. I believe this due to their terrible respect for their fellow man. They wage wars against each other for simple resources, and to become better then their bordering countries. It is utterly disgusting to view such files. And to think we want them in our peaceful alliance! I have seen the files of how these beings act in all occasions. Although it is my duty no matter my opinion to uphold my position of rank and escort the diplomats to Earth. Although what I truelly don't understand is that the people of Earth do not officially know we exist, and of such when we make our unawared appearance in the Earths atmosphere I think the shields will come quite in handy..."

Gule Val Tak'Lui led his flagship Develuger through interstellar space to Earth. He thought that the Human race was still yet unworthy of becoming of such power. Maybe he was right about that. When they arrived the Commander opened another log entry:

DATALOG ENTRY: 195.3758.19396
COMMANDER: Gule Val Tak'Lui

"We are at the approach of Earth. The planet seems so beautiful from above, but as the video footage shows the mass of this great planet is destroyed by pollution and warfare from the Humans. It could draw tears to my eyes.


DATABANK ENTRY #497.5959.79567
COMMAND SHIP: FLAG SHIP DEVELUGER
COMMANER: Gule Val Tak'Lui

LOCATION SECTOR SOL.
MISSION TO PROTECT SECTOR.
ARTIFICIAL PERSONALITY INITIATED...

WE ARE PRESENTLY NEAR THE PLANET EARTH. THE PLANET HOME TO THE SPECIES OF HOME-SAPIEN, OR HUMAN. THE MISSION IS TO PROTECT AND SUPERVISE THE HUMAN RACE TO ALL REGULATIONS OF THE INTERSTELLAR LAW. PROHIBITED ITEMS INCLUDE THE SHARING OF TECHNOLOGICAL ADVANCEMENT BY THE ARMADA UNLESS SO BEHELD ALLOWED BY THE HIGH COUNCIL, ALSO ANY ALLOWANCE OF LETTING ANY POSSIBLE CHANCE OF INTERFERRENCE IN THE HUMAN EXISTENCE.

  atention  RED ALERT - RED ALERT - RED ALERT - RED ALERT  atention 
  • OFFENSIVE ATTACK DETECTED!
  • ORIGIN PLANET EARTH!
  • PROJECTILES DETECTED!
  • HIT - ARMADA ENGAGED IN FIRE ROUND!

0101010100101010100101010101101100100100110101
1010100110101010010101010101010001010010110101
0101010101010101010101010101010010110010101010
1001010101010100111010100101010101010111011010
1110101010110010101010010001001000101011100110

-REBOOT IN PROGRESS-
-SYSTEM AUTOMATIC RECOVERY SCAN IN PROGRESS-
-REBOOT-
-NAVEIL RA'TALI DATABASE ACTIVATED-

NAVEIL RA'TALI: A RACE OF INTELLIGENT BEINGS LOCATED IN THE REZELIAN GALAXY. CURRENTLY TO DATE ARE THE MOST KNOWN TECHNOLOGICALY ADVANCED BEINGS IN EXISTENCE. PEACEFUL BEINGS OF IMMENSE POWER.

CURRENT STANCE: IN PEACE WITH ALL KNOWN INTELLIGENT RACES. RA'LUEG, HOMO-SAPIEN, REI, GOULVED, AND OTHER EVEN MORE PRIMITIVE RACES.

-ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE ENGAGED-

ALERT! SHIP IN CRITICAL CONDITION! SOL ARMADA DESTROYED! $*%&# IS DESTROYED! THE $*#&#*#(@&$ SUPER WEOPON STOLEN! ENGAGEING IN ATUOMATIC... ALERT! SUPERNOVA DETECTED! THE STAR SUN LOCATED IN THE SOL SECTOR HAS GONE SUPERNOVA! UNKNOWN $&*$&$##*...

That was the last known records of the First Great Sol War. No one ever found the remnaints of the NAVEIL RA'TALI's Sol Armada. Then again nobody ever found the Sol sector. There are many mysteries sorounding their disapearance. Some say that they were engaged in a war with the Humans who were onboard the DEVELUGER, and the humans destroyed their entire race. But how could one small ship be able to destroy entire armadas of even more powerful vessels, and for the time involved to understand the ships design and controls as well. Another theory is that the Ra'Tali left our universe to enter the multiverse, the multiverse is the other dimmensions and parrallel universes. They are said to have exscaped and have never been seen again. For the survival of the Humans exscape armada, well that is a different story entirely. 
END OF TRANSMISSION
This story is in current major adjustments to the whole of the mechanism and plot and everything currently.
STILL IN PROGRESS - STILL IN PROGRESS - STILL IN PROGRESS
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« Reply #1 on: June 14, 2006, 12:13:29 AM »

sounds pretty good. I give it four stars, as it isn't completely fluent at points.
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« Reply #2 on: June 14, 2006, 01:49:43 AM »

sounds like a good start
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