Title: Terms and Conditions Proof Reading Post by: Chronos on October 25, 2006, 02:20:32 AM A little proof reading:
Quote Terms and Conditions of Space Odyssey Fair Play Players who try to manipulate the rules and/or use loopholes in them may be deleted from the game. Playing Fairly and Honestly Space Odyssey upholds high standards of moral behavior. Any player who is caught manipulating bugs in the game or has been cheating in any (I) Responsibility of the Developers: The Space Odyssey Team will do everything possible for the game to run flawlessly. Beyond that, Space Odyssey is not liable in any way for server breakdown, faulty programming, etc. Space Odyssey is not liable in any way for server breakdown, faulty programming, etc. This means members accounts suffering losses due to technical problems or game modifications will not be restored to their condition before the ocurrence. Membership (I) Any person who registers an account is considered a member. (II) Space Odyssey is free to play. However there is a gold account membership that offers (III) You may also support Space Odyssey by donating. Donations are non-refundable. Rewarding for donations is at the sole discretion of the Space Odyssey team, and you have no warranty that a donation to Space Odyssey will bring you anything. Donations are simply to support the costs for maintaining and running the game. We encourage you to test the automated system first, if you intend on using it, with a very small amount. The exchange rate for the rewards system will increase as the round progresses, and before a round ends it will be at its maximum due to the iminent round reset. Any problems with the system can be reported to the in-game support account. We will do everything in our power to resolve your issue. (IV) All information submited in the registration process is exclusively for sending your account information, new round details and the occasional update information, and will remain private. It is your responsability to keep your account safe. All password data is encrypted. Space Odyssey will not be responsible for any unauthorized access to your account, we provide logs that you can use to track your account actions. (V) Terminating Membership in Space Odyssey Space Odyssey reserves the right to delete any player account, that has violated the internal rules of the game or Content and Responsibility Space Odyssey is visited by a great number of people. Posts and messages spreading racists, religious intolerance, vulgar and/or other publicly unacceptable topics will not be tolerated. They will lead to warnings and/or sanctions or the direct termination of accounts in question. Forbidden Actions (I) It is forbidden to use any type of software that can harm or interfere with the correct functioning of Space Odyssey. (II) Forbidden Programs It is forbidden to use any bots or other ways of artificial staying logged into the game. The same goes for any program that automates the actions of a player outside the mechanisms provided by the in game menu. Limitations (I) The maximum amounts of accounts per person: You may have multiple accounts only under these conditions: You do _not_ use your accounts to help one single account. You do _not_ finance a lower power account with a higher power one in order to damage lower people using the higher accounts resources. (II) It is forbidden to imitate other players names (e.g. "The One -> The One1") and pretend you are them, as this may damage their reputation in the game. (III) Blocking Any player who has violated the rules may have their accounts blocked for any length of time. Each case is decided separately given the offense and amount of proof. : Copyrights of Space Odyssey regarding the accounts of the players. (I) All accounts and their resources, fleets, Liability Space Odyssey is not responsible for any equipment that has been harmed while the game was played. Space Odyssey is not responsible for any personal injury. The team of Space Odyssey warns that extensive periods of time sitting in front of a computer could be unhealthy. Game updates. Space Odyssey reserves the right to change any aspect of the game without prior warning. If you do not agree with the rules, please close this window and do not enter the game! Green means this is a correction. A All corrections are made according to formal US grammer, to the best of my knowledge. You may leave out any correction you wish to make. Quote I also humbly suggest the option of adding a clause that states that you reserve the right to delete any account at any time for any reason. You might also consider reserving the same right to block IPs. I just think it'd be a nice safety-net against incessant and illogical morons. Such a right may be implied, but I suggest stating it anyways, just to increase your percieved credibility. Few! I spent a long time and stayed up late to get this finished. I hope it helps! ^_^ Title: Re: Terms and Conditions Proof Reading Post by: ars68 on October 25, 2006, 02:51:25 PM how about:
Quote any disadvantages to a players account due to server or programming problems does not entitle the user to a reset before the occurrance. and btw, good job, heh, nice to have a ToS that doesn't have errors in it, lol.Title: Re: Terms and Conditions Proof Reading Post by: Chronos on October 25, 2006, 04:32:57 PM Ya, that sounds good, thanks.
Well, I felt like doing something, and that seemed easy yet tedious, so I did it. Title: Re: Terms and Conditions Proof Reading Post by: SirEmi on October 26, 2006, 12:42:01 PM Thank you Chronos, I'll update the rules with those corrections asap.
Title: Re: Terms and Conditions Proof Reading Post by: PDJ on October 26, 2006, 03:24:25 PM (I) Responsibility of the Developers: The Space Odyssey Team will do everything possible for the game to run flawlessly. Beyond that, Space Odyssey is not liable in any way for server breakdown, faulty programming, etc. Any disadvantages to a players account due to server or programming problems does not entitle the user to a reset before the occurrance. What about: Space Odyssey is not liable in any way for server breakdown, faulty programming, etc. This means members accounts suffering losses due to technical problems or game modifications will not be restored to their condition before the ocurrence. The original phrase sounds as if you were requesting a reset before there was a problem. :) Maybe add: "Compensation and bonuses are at the discretion of the Space Odyssey team." Cheers, PDJ Title: Re: Terms and Conditions Proof Reading Post by: Chronos on October 26, 2006, 05:39:25 PM Ya, your right, change made, *bing*.
Anyways, glad I could help, Sir Emi. Title: Re: Terms and Conditions Proof Reading Post by: ars68 on October 29, 2006, 11:58:27 PM heh, ya, oops, guess I forgot a word there, didn't I? :)) well, didn't matter anyway, I was just throwing it up there to at the least generate new ideas. so mission accomplished B-)
Title: Re: Terms and Conditions Proof Reading Post by: Seither on November 03, 2006, 06:47:46 PM Wow, nice job Chronos....that's about as formal US english as it gets, lol. You should write contracts....no one would ever get a loophole out of you.
Title: Re: Terms and Conditions Proof Reading Post by: Chronos on November 04, 2006, 09:34:05 PM Heh, thanks.
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