Expansion of The Galactic Federation of Free Alliances

[Revan]

It is the year 1280 in the Galactic Alliance. The Jedi Order has kept peace for over a thousand years when screams in the force ecoued threw the universe. 112 of the most powerful Jedi Masters joined together in deep medatation to find out where these screams came from. Year 1282 a convoy is launched to the Galaxy that they belive the screams came from. 3 months later with the new Warp Hole techknology they arrived at their destination.

2 months after their arrival they have the story of the Steller convertors. In 5 more months they unite together colonies and small empires to form a small expansion of the Galatic Alliance.

2 monthes later year 1283 present day.
Ch.1

Galactic Alliance secret base:
"We've been attacked again."
"Another rouge Alliance?"
"Yes Revan I can't see how we can make a diffrence."
"Be patient Bondar if the Galactic Alliance is able to unite enough Alliances we might be able to hunt down and destroy this stelar convertor DDay device thing."
"Ah but if we do will we ever tell them of where we came from will they be ready? Or more important how will they react to you.. people who have the power to move thing's, miniplate people with their mind, or even kill "
"Only time will tell the council meeting will be over soon. I should go and find out what If I'll have an assignment."
Revan walked down the hall to the turbolift and punched in floor 62. Secounds later the door opend to groups of people chating some moving down the hall others leaning aginst the wall. Revan weaved around the groups looking for a familar face.
"Revan I've been looking for you!" boomed a voice from behind him. Revan turned around to see Rickard walking tword him.
"As I was looking for you too."
"And you didn't find me right away? You do have the force remember."
"I am a Jedi I don't use it all the time it's good to be able to rely on more than just the force."
"I see... well a new situation has come up."
"Oh goodie what is it?"
"Come with me to my office I'll tell you there"

The Galactic Shipyard:
"ANOTHER GALAXY!"
"Yes Bondar and try to be a so loud."
"It really took three of the bigest Alliances to destroy one of their motherships? How big was the dam thing?"
" Yes it's big and that's as much as we know right now."
"And let me get this right theres a fraction of them that wants peace... and your the ambassador were sending?"
"Yes I'll be leaving on one of the Mon Cal Star Defenders shortly."
"Sounds like a trap to me I should come too."
"No I'll be fine see you when I get back" Revan walked away too the docking station. 1 hour later the Mon Cal ship Solar flare left dock and jumped to hyperspace with Bondar stowing away.

Solar Flare Bridge:
"General Nemin how long until we reach our destination?"
"5 minutes Master Revan."
"I'll be going down to the Docking bay then." Revan walked tword the turbolift when he suddenly stopped. "Bondar..." secounds later the trubolift day opend and Bondar walked out. "Bondar how nice it is too see you."
"Hay listen I know your not exactly happy right now but you need me.... besides it was getting boring just hanging around the docks watching freighters come in and go."
"Your lucky I don't throw you out the air lock right now" Revan sighed. 3 minutes later they got into one of the ARC-170's. Looking out the thingypit window they watched as the Solar Flare reverted back to realspace. And in front of them was a ship  about 3 times the size of the Solar Flare.
"That's it?" Bondar asked puzzled.
"I guss so but reports said that their ships were a hell of a lot bigger than this." Then suddenly smaller ships started coming out of what looked like tenticals on the side of the ship. Soon they covered the Solar Flare flying around them. Revan opened a channel to the bridge.
"Nemin what's going on?"
"Master Revan they have requested for us to wait until escort formation is finished then to follow them in."
"Tell them I'll be taking a small fighter in and drop the hangar sheild wall."
"Yes Master Revan." The com clicked off.
"I'd wish they'ed stop calling me Master Revan" Revan sighed. The sheild wall dropped leaving the hangar open to the vacume of space the ARC-170 lifted off and shot off into space. The hundreds of Reaver ships danced around Revans ship as it aproached the Reaver mother ship.The ARC-170 flew out of the escort formation and into the Hangar of the Reaver ship.

Reaver Mother Ship:
"Well I guss it is bigger than I thought... Bondar?" Bondar sat transfixed looking out the window at the hundreds of Reaver ships landing around them. "Hay" Revan tapped Bondar on the shoulder.
"WHAT!"
"Let's get going."
"Oh... right." Revan poped the hatch and they jumped out onto the floor. Simatainisly all the hatches on the Reaver ships poped open and a multi tentical squid/octopus creature climed out and onto the floor.
"So those are Reavers."
"I guss so Revan." Directly ahead of them a door opened up and 3 Reavers walked out two in the front and one in the back.
"Welcome Reaven" the Reaver said walking up to him.
"You speak basic...?"
"Yes Revan we learned it from the computers of a burned out hulk from a ship that encountered one of the fleets from the Grand Reaver Empire." "We are whats left of a resistant force called the Eternity Federation." "Now lets go to my meeting chamber." Six of the pilots detatched from the ranks of Reavers standing by their ships and escorted Reaven and Bondar threw the doorway down the hall to a turbo lift.

[Revan]

I'll be adding more to it later. I'm making it so it ties in with several other stories.

[ars68]

"Sorry It really took three of the bigest Alliances to destroy one of their motherships?"

this sounds like you are saying that comparing my story to star wars, the star wars ships could have blown it up much easier...

lol, funny, yet somehow misleading.  the biggest of any ships ever conceived that I know of in any star wars related material, was the deathstar, and the was supposed to be as big as a small moon.  the ship I tried to describe in my story was supposed to be as large as a sun, being many many thousands of times larger then even a deathstar.  in fact, comparing deathstars to the stellar converters, it took 10-20 deathstars firing at the same point in the back to wipe it out.  now, some true star wars who go beyond just the movies will point out that there WAS a weapon capable of destroying an entire sun, but it was only fired 1-2 times, I believe, then the only person who could fire it died after making it unusable to anyone else (or something like that, not sure myself)

just thought I should put this up before anyone starts wondering where it came from and why it sounds so misleading somehow.

other then the apparent ties in between star wars and this, and the resulting confusion from it, it looks fairly promising.  lol.

[Seither]

Yes, good job, though you lose points for unoriginality. Some spelling/grammer errors here and there, but not bad enough to be unreadable. I give you an A for effort and above average work.

[Smee]

i give him a C+ becouse im a hard ass lol ^^


Smee



becouse u have admitted to making mistakes u have been demoted to a D+ and u can have u C+ back when the corrections have been made ^^

Smee

[Seither]

lol, yes you are smee.

[Revan]

"Sorry It really took three of the bigest Alliances to destroy one of their motherships?"

this sounds like you are saying that comparing my story to star wars, the star wars ships could have blown it up much easier...

lol, funny, yet somehow misleading.  the biggest of any ships ever conceived that I know of in any star wars related material, was the deathstar, and the was supposed to be as big as a small moon.  the ship I tried to describe in my story was supposed to be as large as a sun, being many many thousands of times larger then even a deathstar.  in fact, comparing deathstars to the stellar converters, it took 10-20 deathstars firing at the same point in the back to wipe it out.  now, some true star wars who go beyond just the movies will point out that there WAS a weapon capable of destroying an entire sun, but it was only fired 1-2 times, I believe, then the only person who could fire it died after making it unusable to anyone else (or something like that, not sure myself)

just thought I should put this up before anyone starts wondering where it came from and why it sounds so misleading somehow.

other then the apparent ties in between star wars and this, and the resulting confusion from it, it looks fairly promising.  lol.

NO NO NO I didn't typ that at all I thought I fixed all those things for some reason when I post some words get added or changed and then I have to go in and usually delet my post and change the wording.

[Seither]

yes, well, you should change it to how it should read then, to prevent further misuderstanding.

[Revan]

I've added on some more.

[Seither]

sounds good.

[Revan]

I updated it again.

[Seither]

Good job.

[Lammalord]

just to let you know... present day in spaceoddyssey is somwere around 76000 or something i dont know look up what emi posted about chroam he has it there and emi's the boss :p

[Seither]

Does it matter? a small detail such as the year can be changed if needed. He's writing this for fun, not for history, like Ars68, Gunfighter_Frank, and I are working on atm.

[fat monkey13]

And it says

It is the year 1280 in the Galactic Alliance.

not the entire universe. This Galactic Alliance may have its own calendar.